Okay... this is actually a poem that I have recently written... I think it's pretty good, I guess.... I don't know how I'll feel about it in a month though. 'Cause right now, I'm trying to rewrite another poem of mine and it's frustrating mostly because I don't really think the rough draft is that great and I have an idea it's just taking a long while to come out.... Oh, well... this is actually a rough draft as well so, be nice.
Wedding Farewells
The sun sets on
Lilac and white bouqets
And ribbons hanging on
Delicate arms.
She stands beside him,
On his tall ship
Wrapped in white with her veil
Floating behind her
In the salty breeze.
Leaning over the rails
They shout their farewells
To the smiling wedding party
And her tearful father.
Into the misty breeze
The newlywed embark;
On a green sea sparkling
Red and golden shards
Left by the withering sun.
Posted by
Nicole
2 comments:
In order to know why I did that, you must understand the kind of mood I was in...I was bored beyond belief and couldn't think of anything else to udate with...lol!
But as far as your poem goes, it is rather good. It flows fairly well... I love how you describe the veil and the father's tears....=)
Oh I guess I misread your comment, I thought you were saying that I shouldn't ever write things like that again! Haha! Adios mi amiga!
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